How's my first attempt??

I have not written anything like that before. Please tell me how's it??

Shukar hai tuhada pitaa ji
Tuc dita mainu sab kuj ji
Tuc krde sadi pratpalna ji
Jisda udaar mei kde na muka skde ji
Iko Ik shaunk hai pita ji
Ki tuhada naam swaas giraass japaaan ji
Hor kuj mainu chaida na ji
Kyunki sab vadaeyaaan har naam vich ji
Tuhada naam mera adaaaar ji
Ik tuhade darshana di cha ji
Jodo mainu sangat chji
kyunki vich sangat har prabh vase ji.........

waheguru

Great start, but no need to be so formal during poetry, words like "kio kai" can be disincluded to help poem flow better. Tuhada can be exchanged for tera when reffering to akal purakh. Overall great effort

Really thanks to you both for such great appreciations and tips. I would try to use these tips in my next attempts.

Guru Sahib Kirpa Karan......

Good efforts.